Stilistische Fallen im technischen Englisch – und Lösungen David Burkhart Vortrag für die tekom Nordrhein Aachen 8. Oktober, 2009.

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Stilistische Fallen im technischen Englisch – und Lösungen David Burkhart Vortrag für die tekom Nordrhein Aachen 8. Oktober, 2009

1. Develop a clear writing style Technical English uses simple, direct, easily-understandable vocabulary. Examples File not found NO STEP Bad data

Develop a clear writing style 1. Use simple grammatical structures. Avoid subordinate clauses. Loading a cassette module: Place a new cassette in the cassette module. Lock it into position. Press the Pump key on the operating panel of the cassette module. The cassette module closes automatically and is pumped down.

Develop a clear writing style 2. Keep your sentences short and simple. Do not write like this: Over the last several decades, increasingly exacting demands have been placed on the quality and functionality of electronic components in the motor vehicles, and this trend is set to continue.

Develop a clear writing style 3. Avoid substantival expressions. Do not write like this: The two workers accomplished the division of the material into two piles.

Develop a clear writing style Das Ablösen des Etikettes vom Übergabestempel erfolgt druckluftunterstützt. Suggested procedure: 1. Rewrite the German text in simple German. 2. Translate that. Do not attempt to translate poor German into English directly! It won′t work!

Develop a clear writing style We first rewrite this into simpler German: Mittels Druckluft wird das Etikett vom Übergabestempel abgelöst.

Develop a clear writing style This is easy to translate: With compressed air, the label is removed from the transfer stamp.

Develop a clear writing style Die Zugriffsberechtigungen und die Zuordnung eines Nutzers zu einer dieser Gruppen dürfen auch durch die Systemadministratoren nicht veränderbar sein.

Develop a clear writing style Die Systemadministratoren dürfen die Zugriffsberechtigungen … nicht verändern können? Die Systemadministratoren dürfen die Zugriffsberechtigungen … nicht verändern?

Develop a clear writing style Die Systemadministratoren dürfen die Zugriffsberechtigungen und die Zuordnung eines Nutzers zu einer dieser Gruppen nicht verändern. The system administrators are not allowed to change the access privileges and the assignment of a user to one of these groups.

Develop a clear writing style: examples 1. Um ein Verstopfen des Systems zu vermeiden, muß in regelmäßigen Intervallen ein Reinigungvorgang erfolgen 2. Der Reinigungsprozess erfolgt durch das Drehen der Maschine im Servicebetrieb. 3. ... Diese Teile sind im wesentlichen zusammengefaßt im Elektronik-Schrank.

Develop a clear writing style: examples 4. Data Warehousing ist hierzulande erst von sehr wenigen Anwendererfahrungen geprägt. 5. Neben den eigentlichen Parametern enthalten diese Dateien auch Kommentare, mit denen die Wirkungsweise der einzelnen Werte dargestellt bzw. die für den einzelnen Parameter möglichen Werte angegeben werden. 6. Der Menüpunkt Fläche zeigt die Gesamtfläche des aktuellen Raumes, ohne Abzug von Stützen- und Säulenflächen an. Im Textausdruck findet eine Differenzierung statt.

2. Avoid substantival expressions Erfahrung, Erfolg und deren Interaktionen Experience, success and their interactions

Avoid substantival expressions Problem English does not typically use substantival structures like this. Recommendation Use a verbal pattern. Applying the recommendation…

Avoid substantival expressions Experience, success and how they interact Experience, success and the way they interact

Avoid substantival expressions It is possible that the rejection of the constitution might provoke a radical restructuring of the European unification project. If the French reject the constitution, the European unification project could be radically restructured.

Avoid substantival expressions General topics should always be introduced with the –ing (gerund) form. 3.2 EOF-Byte-Überprüfung 3.2 Checking the EOF byte 4.5 Aligning the cams 12.7 Inspecting the machine

Avoid substantival expressions: examples 1. Compulsory reading material 2. In addition, the software provides virtual input devices which allow you the direct input on the screen. 3. Mit uns gibt es keinen Ausverkauf städtischer Wohnungen.

3. Use …-ing for complex thoughts The English language has a grammatical device, the gerund, which allows us to express complex ideas very simply. Example More and more electronic circuits are being built into vehicles, and the demands made of testers are increasing. Or: More and more electronic circuits are being built into vehicles. The demands made of testers are increasing.

Use …-ing for complex thoughts Problem This is choppy and difficult to read. Recommendation Use the pattern … -ing for complex thoughts. Applying the recommendation More and more electronic circuits are being built into vehicles, increasing the demands made of testers.

Use …-ing for complex thoughts Der äußerst robuste und schwere Verladekopf drückt die speziell entwickelte Kunststoffdichtung optimal in die Tanköffnung und sorgt somit für eine staubfreie Verladung. The following translation reads well: The extremely robust and heavy loading nozzle presses the specially developed plastic seal optimally into the tank opening, ensuring dust-free loading.

Use …-ing for complex thoughts Benutzt man statt Gleichstrom Wechselstrom, so bezeichnet man den im Wechselstromkreis gegebenen Widerstand mit Z und erhält für die obige Grundformel … The following translation reads well: If AC current is used instead of DC, then the resistance in the AC circuit is designated as Z, resulting in the following for the above basic equation …

Use …-ing for complex thoughts: exercises 1. Yachting excellence is revolutionizing the boating industry and opens up new worlds of experience to spoiled yacht lovers. 2. Check the cable before you check the electrodes. 3. Die Umstellung der Bordspannung auf 24 V verursacht weitere Probleme.

4. Avoid using the passive voice Use the passive voice only: 1. If the agent is totally unimportant: Robots are used for repetitive activities. or: 2. To emphasize the important thing: Ink droplets are ejected from the nozzle at high speed.

Avoid using the passive voice Durch Eingabe eines zweistelligen Parameters wird die Zeit vorgewählt. Select a time by entering a two-digit parameter.

Avoid using the passive voice: examples 1. It is maintained by the contractor that ... 2. Your letter has been received by us, and ... 3. When the display has been noted and is no longer needed, press the R/S button to proceed with the program.

5. Each sentence should communicate only one thought Do not attempt to express the following in a single sentence: Die einzelnen per Tastendruck abrufbaren Menüs entnehmen Sie bitte folgenden Bildern. Damit bei Wechsel der Flaschengröße seitens des Abfüllbetriebes der Strahlengang angepaßt werden kann, ist eine Justiervorrichtung erforderlich, die den Strahl in der Meßbox genau an die zu analysierende Flaschengröße anpaßt.

Each sentence should communicate only one thought: examples 1. The increasing amount of in-boat electronics is causing ever greater complexity in terms of the interactions of individual components and is the biggest challenge facing the boat industry's entire value chain. 2. The TG4 has a stainless steel front this will help in cleaning the oven.

6. Avoid amputated sentences Mit der Taste FAST kann die TEACH-Geschwindigkeit umgeschaltet werden. (Funktion, wie Manuell-Betrieb). Recommendation Fully write out the thought in parentheses. … Dafür verwendet man die Funktion zur Geschwindigkeitsumschaltung, die auch im Manuell-Betrieb zur Verfügung steht.

Avoid amputated sentences How do you express the following in English? Durch Drücken der Reset-Taste ... Nach Erreichen der Obergrenze ... Programmabbruch mit der Abort-Taste

Avoid amputated sentences Programmabbruch mit der Abort-Taste 1. Write a fully written-out German sentence. Example: Wenn Sie die Ausführung des Programms abbrechen möchten, dann drücken Sie die Abort-Taste. 2. Say that in English. If you want to abort program execution, then press the Abort key.

Avoid amputated sentences Durch Drücken der Reset-Taste wird zum Hauptmenü zurückgekehrt. Durch Drücken der Reset-Taste Rückkehr zum Hauptmenü. If it is clear that the user is to do something, then write the sentence as a command: Drücken Sie die Reset-Taste, um zum Hauptmenü zu gelangen. Press the Reset key to return to the main menu.

Avoid amputated sentences: examples 1. Bei Verwendung der Schrittgröße 4 sollte immer dann in das special-Menü zurückgekehrt werden, wenn mit Sicherheit davon auszugehen ist, daß das Ölfilter verschmutzt oder beschädigt ist. Ansonsten Verletzungsgefahr!

Avoid amputated sentences: examples 2. Auswahl der Leerfahrfunktion generell nur bei vorheriger Entfernung aller Flaschen vom Förderband möglich! Sonst Flaschenstau!

Avoid amputated sentences: examples 3. Die Voraussetzung für die Benutzung der Maus ist jedoch die Auswahl des Treibers L1 durch den autorisierten Benutzer (Punkt Maustreiber im Menü Systemeinstellungen). Bei Verwendung des falschen Treibers bzw. Nichtauswahl eines Treibers erfolgt Fehlfunktion der Maus. Nach Auswahl des Treibers Warmstart des Rechners erforderlich (Reset).

Avoid amputated sentences: examples 4. Rückspulen des Bandes durch gleichzeitiges Drücken der Tasten Back und Tape. Hörbares Bandendegeräusch nach Erreichen des Bandendes dann Stop drücken.

7. Decompress compact wordings Schwellenhöhe beachten! Poor English Heed threshold height! The problem: The German sentence is an overly compact way of warning people to not underestimate the distance to the ground. The poor translation does not tell people what they are supposed to do.

Decompress compact wordings Recommendation Determine what the author means. Then write out what he or she means, in full detail. Tell people exactly what to do!

Decompress compact wordings The ground might be very far down. So be very careful when you leave the subway and step down to the ground. Do not fall and break your legs!

Decompress compact wordings Comply with the wiring instructions issued by the manufacturer when motors are powered by inverters.

Decompress compact wordings: examples 1. Please take note of the reduced grease utilization period of the ball bearings after storage periods exceeding one year. 2. Die Transistoren T14 und T9 sehen ähnlich aus, Vertauschungsgefahr!

Decompress compact wordings: examples 3. Save the data if necessary. 4. Wasserstand kontrollieren, evtl. nachfüllen.

8. First word = conceptual subject Das Herz des Systems ist der Hebearm. Poor English The heart of the system is the lifting arm.

First word = conceptual subject Recommendation 1. Identify who or what is doing something in each sentence. That is the conceptual subject of the sentence. 2. Make sure this conceptual subject is the grammatical subject of the sentence. Rewrite the text if it is not. 3. Place this grammatical subject at the very beginning of the sentence.

First word = conceptual subject Applying the recommendation The lifting arm is the heart of the system. This is easy to understand.

First word = conceptual subject Word order is actually much more complicated than the above discussion would have you believe. The fundamental rule is: Always keep the main message together. Never provide details within the main message. Example John saw last Tuesday afternoon the new car.

First word = conceptual subject Where do we put details? We place details either before or after the main message, like this: main message detail

First word = conceptual subject When do details go before the main message, when afterwards?

First word = conceptual subject If a detail is important, then it goes first. For example: Last Tuesday afternoon, John saw the new car. (When did John see the new car?) If the detail is unimportant, then it goes last. John saw the new car last Tuesday afternoon.

First word = conceptual subject I enjoyed a long, pleasant meal and then met my wife for a movie at our local cinema despite the thunderstorm. Despite the thunderstorm, I enjoyed a long, pleasant meal and then met my wife for a movie at our local cinema.

First word = conceptual subject Although our neighbors had a party in the garden that lasted well into the night and played music all night that I cannot stand, I slept well. I slept well, although our neighbors had a party in the garden that lasted well into the night and played music all night that I cannot stand.

First word = conceptual subject: examples 1. Das Fenster mit den neuesten Login-Werten darf der Benutzer weder ausdrucken noch speichern. 2. Die Befehle werden jeden Samstag ausgeführt. 3. Die Namen der Maschinen werden jetzt im Eingabefenster eingegeben. 4. Frau Meyers fragte während des Spaziergangs nach dem Namen meiner Frau. 5. Data between two computers is transmitted by modems.

First word = conceptual subject: examples 6. In service mode, the status of the inlets and outlets can be checked. 7. After the fault is eliminated, a reference run must be made. 8. Vor Eingabe der benötigten Zahlen liest der Benutzer die Anweisung durch.

9. Do not overwrite Nobody is payed to read manuals. People are payed to do their job, such as operating a complex machine. We can make their work easier for them by being direct and brief. Example Install the parts as demonstrated by the following illustration. Recommendation Reduce this sentence to the bare essentials. Applying the recommendation …

Do not overwrite Install the parts as shown:

Do not overwrite Identify words that are not saying anything, such as: · … die jeweils aktuelle Maske · … die einzelnen Drähte · … in terms of the interactions of individual components Do not translate them.

Do not overwrite: exercises 1. In dem Feld Dateinamen wird der programmintern angelegte Dateiname für den jeweiligen Gebäudeabschnitt zur Information angezeigt. 2. In caring for your blender, you should remember to care for it like you would any other electrical appliance. 3. The plate is supported again by a thick wire that extends down into a connecting pin in the base, and the exact position of the pin is the pin next to the notch in the base.

10. Resist the temptation to use typographical shortcuts Authors sometimes use typographical shortcuts. In the interest of clear communication, it is better to write out full sentences. Example The original/copy can now be loaded. Use this application to store/back up the files.

Resist the temptation to use typographical shortcuts Recommendation Write out exactly what you mean. Applying the recommendation You can now load the original or copy. Use this application to store or back up the files.

11. Address your reader directly General statement instead of a command Example: It is essential to comply with the safety notes in Section 2 during installation! Suggestion Comply with the safety notes in Section 2 during installation. or: During installation, you absolutely must comply with the safety notes in Section 2.

Address your reader directly "sollen" instead of a command Example: Der Cursor soll jetzt links von dem Eingabefenster stehen. Place the cursor to the left of the input window. or: Make sure the cursor is to the left of the input window.

Address your reader directly The passive voice instead of a command Example: Der Dichtring wird gereinigt und mit wenig Dichtungsfett eingefettet. Clean the sealing ring and lubricate it with just a little sealing grease.

Address your reader directly If the agent is unimportant, use the passive voice. If the reader is to do something, express the thought as a command. Ein Vertauschen der Farbanschlüsse der Krokodilklemmen - schwarz auf rot oder umgekehrt - sollte vermieden werden. Do not swap the alligator clips. Do not connect the black one where the red one goes, or vice versa.

Address your reader directly: examples 1. Nun wird der Lautsprecher montiert, dazu soll als erstes die Anschlusslitzen 48 und 49 auf die richtige Länge von jeweils 60 mm gebracht werden. 2. Jetzt wird die andere Schutzfolie abgezogen und nun kann der Lautsprecher auf die Leiterplatte geklebt werden. 3. Compliance with the safety precautions of Chapter 2 is necessary. 4. Seals must be glued in on one side.

12. Be careful with noun-verb combinations Written German often uses combinations of nouns and verbs. When Germans write in English, a common problem is that the writer selects the wrong verb. The result is difficult to understand – and embarrassing for the author. My experience is that even Germans with an excellent command of the English language often have this problem.

Be careful with noun-verb combinations Recommendation Use a verb, rather than a noun-verb combination. Example … in Abzug zu bringen. to place into deduction?? to put into deduction?? to bring into deduction??

Be careful with noun-verb combinations Applying the recommendation to deduct

Be careful with noun-verb combinations Example Die Betonung auf xyz legen. to lay emphasis on ?? to put emphasis on ?? to place emphasis on ??

Be careful with noun-verb combinations Applying the recommendation to emphasize

Be careful with noun-verb combinations: exercise Express the following in English: Vor der jeweiligen Geräte-Gleichstrom-Speisungseinheit findet eine Wandlung vom zugeführten Versorgungsnetz mit Wechselspannung (s. 110 V / 60 Hz oder 230 V / 50 Hz) statt.

Be careful with noun-verb combinations: exercise The AC line power (110 V at 60 Hz or 230 V at 50 Hz) is converted, before the DC power input for each device.

13. Unfold your sentences German writers often place a great deal of information before the noun. This is totally foreign to English. Good example He was the man who gave me the advice that saved my life.

Unfold your sentences Avoid the temptation to create a compact structure, such as: The life-saving man … In English, that sounds very strange. Write several English sentences for one German sentence. Use plenty of words, to express exactly what the author wants to say in simple language.

Unfold your sentences: exercises Express the following in English: 1. Die in einer Reihe von internationalen Studien vielfach belegte Wirksamkeit des Mittels ist durch die Untersuchungen von Prof. Schneider – noch einmal – zweifelsfrei bewiesen worden. 2. Dabei war nicht vorgegeben, jedoch erwünscht, mit einer anvisionierten, relativ großen Versuchspersonen-anzahl Aussagen in Richtung möglichst „hoher, statistischer Signifikanz“ zu treffen.

Unfold your sentences: solution Note that this sentence contains two statements: Eine Reihe von internationalen Studien hat die Wirksamkeit des Mittels vielfach belegt. Die Untersuchungen von Prof. Schneider haben diese Wirksamkeit noch einmal zweifelsfrei bewiesen.

14. Use simple verbs Beim Transport stellt das Gewicht des Förderarms das größte Problem dar. Good translation During transportation, the weight of the lifting arm is the major problem.

Use simple verbs A transformer may be present in the VS system. Applying the recommendation Your VS system might have a transformer. or: Your VS system might include a transformer.

Use simple verbs Sometimes, the verb can be eliminated completely. Example: Comply with the wiring instructions issued by the manufacturer. Applying the recommendation Comply with the manufacturer's wiring instructions. or: Comply with the wiring instructions of the manufacturer.

Use simple verbs: examples 1. The final date of a sensing period is determined by the beginning date plus the duration (number of days). 2. In case a threshold is reached, the discount is granted. 3. All systems raising error codes can return warning messages …

Use simple verbs: examples 4. Transfer decoding can only occur for the execute command. 5. Only GCD-relevant elements are contained in this drawing. 6. Erst nach Vorliegen eines ausreichenden Behälter-Füllstandes kann mit der Flaschenreinigung begonnen werden.

15. Since X, Y … Clearly identify and differentiate cause and effect. Consider the following: Since the transistor polarity is vitally important, especially for the types 2N2222, 2N4381, 2N5509 and others, the patterns on the component side must be checked ...

Since X, Y … This is difficult to understand, for two reasons: 1. In English, a structure such as: Since X, Y is inherently confusing. English is „short of breath“, so to speak. Native speakers hate to retain one thought in their heads while being told something else. In the above example, we must remember „Since the transistor polarity ...“, while reading „the patterns on the component side...“

Since X, Y … 2. The above sentence is based on the pattern: Since X, Y The reader needs the comma, in order to clearly separate X from Y. However, the author lists transistor types, which are also separated by commas. So it is difficult to find the comma which separates X from Y. Since the transistor polarity is vitally important, especially for the types 2N2222, 2N4381, 2N5509 and others, the patterns on the component side must be checked ...

Since X, Y … Solution 1. Rewrite such thoughts as two sentences. 2. Remove “since” from the first sentence. Start the second sentence with “Thus”, or “Hence”, or “For this reason”. Example The transistor polarity is vitally important, especially for the types 2N2222, 2N4381, 2N5509 and others. Thus, the patterns on the component side must be checked ...

Since X, Y … The transistor polarity is vitally important, especially for the types 2N2222, 2N4381, 2N5509 and others. Thus, the patterns on the component side must be checked ... Add parentheses: The transistor polarity is vitally important (especially for the types 2N2222, 2N4381, 2N5509 and others). Thus, the patterns on the component side must be checked ...

16. Express concrete ideas in a concrete way English is a very concrete language. Thoughts about people should be expressed in the form: Who is doing what?

Express concrete ideas in a concrete way Example Es findet ein Umdenken satt.

Express concrete ideas in a concrete way Es findet ein Umdenken satt. Poor translation A rethinking takes place. Problem Native speakers of English will not understand this. We want to know: Who is doing what?

Express concrete ideas in a concrete way Recommendation Express this as a concrete thought, which is about people and their attitudes. Applying the recommendation People's attitudes about […] are changing. or: People are changing their attitudes about […]. This is easy to understand.

Express concrete ideas in a concrete way: exercises 1. Der Vorschlag ist gekommen … 2. Dies ist – vermutlich! – eine Aufforderung zum Handeln. 3. “’Es gibt keine grundlegende Abkehr von diesem Kurs’, erklärten ihre Sprecher Andrea Nahles und Michael Müller in Berlin” (SZ for May 26, 2005)

17. Your sentences should flow Overloaded German sentences  several sentences Short, choppy sentences: join together. Sie können die Ausmaße von Türen ändern (Breite ändern, Höhe ändern) oder die Lage in einer Wand neu bestimmen (horizontal bzw. vertikal verschieben).

Your sentences should flow: exercises 1. Sie können die Ausmaße von Türen ändern (Breite ändern, Höhe ändern) oder die Lage in einer Wand neu bestimmen (horizontal bzw. vertikal verschieben). 2. Bei Anwendung eines 5-Ω drahtgewickelten (Präzisions-) bzw. eines 75-Ω NTC-Widerstands (Baureihe RW 450 bzw. 324) bzw. bei Einsatz in rauher Umgebung ... 3. The computer is a Model 1. It is 7 years old. It does not have sufficient RAM. No new programs will run on it. 4. The taste test is important in food development. The test is run by lab technicians. The technicians are supervised by a sensory evaluator. (Steven E. Pauley und Daniel G. Riordan, Technical Report Writing Today, 1993, S. 82)

18. Use commas properly 1. Never use commas as you would in German. Never write: She said, the motorcycle was too expensive. He claimed, the participants arrived late. 2. Separate subordinate clauses with commas: As he stumbled down the hill, Mr. Jones noticed a car coming by. Everyone looked forward to the party, although the planning had been chaotic.

Use commas properly 3. Subordinate clauses in the middle of a sentence must be surrounded by commas. Mr. Jones, everybody's favorite teacher, was unable to attend the assembly. The price of gasoline, experts agree, will increase steadily in future years. The New York Times, the most respected newspaper in the United States, will be increasing its subscription rates as of January 1, 2006. 4. Insert commas after hence, thus, or therefore whenever a sentence begins with one of these words. Hence, the printer failed to work properly. Thus, the diameter is directly related to the circumfrance. Therefore, the asylum-seeker will be deported. 5. Separate a series of adjectives with commas. Everyone admired her beautiful, sleek, fascinating car. They liked the fast, powerful, expensive, high-speed boat.

Use commas properly 6. If possible, insert only one comma per sentence. Typical problem cases: Thus, the diameter is directly related to the circumference, although the exact relationship is unknown. If possible, examine the consumption of flour in Third-World Countries, but it might be difficult to find relevant data. Often, the solution is to divide the statement into two sentences: Thus, the diameter is directly related to the circumference. However, the exact relationship is unknown. If possible, examine the consumption of flour in Third-World Countries. However, it might be difficult to find relevant data.

Use commas properly: examples 1. This section shows a template to store a routine tree to the ABC database by using the XYZ batch interface. 2. The thresholds must be combined making sure that only one threshold can be reached at a certain time. 3. He claimed, the best essay was submitted by your sister.

Use commas properly: examples 4. For a description of the monitor settings see section 5.8.7 “Rate Plan for the Discount feature”. 5. Three accumulators count the administrator’s CPU usage as follows. 6. In my opinion the publishing date should be moved up but I realize this may cause hardship for some people. 7. She said, the work must be done whether you like it or not.

19. Use hyphens properly 1. Never use hyphens as you would in German Never write: Enter your name in the name-field. We all attended the Christmas-party. The PC-printer is not working correctly. The correct punctuation is as follows: Enter your name in the name field. (or Name field) We all attended the Christmas party. The PC printer is not working correctly. 2. Place a hyphen between an amount and the unit Example: She purchased a 9-volt battery. (NOT: 9-volt-battery or 9 volt battery!) We were amazed by the 400-pound elephant. (NOT: 400-pound-elephant!)

Use hyphens properly 3. Use hyphens to clarify what an adjective is modifying Without the proper punctuation, a reader might not know what an adjective is modifying: the word which follows immediately after it or the subject of the sentence. Consider the following: The hot water faucet is broken. This is confusing. What is hot, the water or the faucet? There are two possibilities:

Use hyphens properly The men repaired the cold water pipe. People should invest money in private old age insurance. The men repaired the cold-water pipe. People should invest money in private old-age insurance.

Use hyphens properly: examples 1. Thus a sharp rapid decrease indicates high quality a broad decrease is a sign of low quality. 2. The problem however can not be solved as described in the e-mail-message. 3. She claimed, the best essay was writen by your brother. 4. In case that a voltage threshold is reached the discount is granted with the next voltage surge. 5. Therefor the shelves can be repainted but that will be expensive.

Use hyphens properly: examples 6. For the Monitor settings refer to section 5.8 “Rating”. 7. The user's name must be entered in the Name-Field. 8. In my opinion the printing-date should be pushed back but this could cause hardship for some people. 9. Depending on the noise level the customer must take all required steps to protect operating personnel in accordance with noise protection regulations and standards. 10. The PC-cabel is broken.

Use hyphens properly: examples 11. Why I asked do you reject my proposals which I worked on so long? 12. The radio needs new 1½ volt batteries I believe. 13. Why I asked do you reject the proposals I worked on so long? 14. She said, the work must be done whether you like it or not 15. The 4-liter-hat is too big for my head. 16. While standing on the top of a hill she called her children to her side. 17. I talk on my handy all the time since I have this flat-rate.

Wrap-up exercises Improve the following sentences We must inform each employee that she must fill out a W-4-form. There are five basic requirements that a software must fulfill. It is maintained by the user that … The user must fill in the required informations in the field Mask-name. It is believed that ... By entering a two-digit parameter, the time is selected After the time "dup2" runs out, the connection to the remote-station is built up.

Wrap-up exercises Translate the following German sentences: Das Fenster mit den neuesten Login-Werten darf der Benutzer weder ausdrucken noch speichern. Nach Erreichen des Sollwertes wird die Anlage abgeschaltet. Nach erfolgter Prüfung seiner Login-Kennung übernimmt der Benutzer Administratoraufgaben. Vor Eingabe der benötigten Zahlen liest der Benutzer die Anweisung durch. Die Überprüfung der in das OMC noch nicht übertragenen Datenbits erfordert einen zweiten Eintrag in das Heimatregister. Das bereits vorher eingegebene Beispiel soll in der Datei "Field lengths" abgespeichert werden. Der neue Mikroprozessor-Chip ist in 0,25-µm-Technik realisiert. Die Schnittstelle ist im vorliegenden Gerät als leistungsfähiges 320-bps-Ausgabeport realisiert. Die Rechte eines Administrators erhält der Benutzer erst nach Prüfung seiner Login-Kennung